The Ocean Maker Narrative

In Rimu this week we did a narrative story based from a video and we would watch a bit of it and write our own ending. The video was called The Ocean Maker.

We had to write what the person saw and how she felt. Plus what she was doing. I did reread it.

Here is a photo of what we had to do and the other small thing we had to do.

I found it challenging to put in more descriptive phrases.

Here is the story and also I will show you the video but I have to warn you the video has a little bit of blood in it.

Hello human,This is my story of what happened to this place… Ok…

It started when I was traveling to a washed up desert that use to be a sea.I was a girl who was doing a project that I was sent to do… It was called the Rain/Ocean maker…

When I was flying, I saw wrecked ships and old camps… The one main thing that caught my eye was a lighthouse… I felt blank and hopeless… But then the the lighthouse’s light pointed to a cloud… I felt much better… Then went to the light to see if anyone was there… Soon I opened the door and went up the stairs… The stairs were dusty as if it was not been used and no one cleaned it… Soon I found a door and opened it… There was a man looking grim… I asked him what happened… He told me that It used to be a harbor where people selected water for their homes… He didn’t say anything else. Then I asked for his name. He said it was Roy… He didn’t want to look at me but his eyes didn’t agree with him and then he did a little glance at my eyes… His face told me that He wanted me to get out.

At that very moment. I told him about the “Rain Maker”… Then he got excited about the project and why I was doing this… I knew this was going to bee a legend that no one would forget… Me being excited, I ran to my plane and got out the blueprints with the parts… A week later we started to make it and we did fail lots… Roy have almost given up… But after six months, We had finished it… Anyway I was really happy…

A day later, we had tested it And it had worked… The Rain/ocean Maker turns the clouds to make full up with water and drop rain an unnatural amount on the sand… Then we started to clean up and fix the camp sites. A month later the news heard about what happened… Roy thought he would be famous and power went to his head… He wanted to be the only one with power… He had a mental break down and Murdered me… He stuffed me inside the RainMaker… I thought I was going to die… But Something else happened the wires went out of place and the system had an error… It had rebuilt itself with its safety switch programing… Then it and I merged into one and I became a machine with a human brain that was powered with water… Then there was good bye Roy and now it will be good bye you…